Tuesday, February 21, 2012

First Campaign Challenge!

Yay! We received the first challenge for the Writers' Platform-Building Campaign. Here are the rules:

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count. 
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
  • end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)
  • include the word "orange" in the story
  • write in the same genre you normally write
  • make your story 200 words exactly!
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Shadows crept across the wall as I lay in my bed and stared up at the ceiling, adamant that I would not look at the boy stationed by the door.

I frowned at my orange jumpsuit and picked at an imaginary bit of fluff. “You’d think they would make this in a more flattering colour. Lime green, butter yellow?”

When he didn’t say anything, I couldn’t help myself. I had to sneak a peek at him.

He was still there in the same position he had been in for the last four hours. It was a miracle he could stand there for so long. Not a single muscle twitched on his face and, I swear, he barely blinked. Now that was dedication.

“Do you like ice cream?” I asked as I shifted around so I was on my side. “I love it in any flavour. What about you?”

Silence met me and I continued in a nonchalant tone. “And don’t even get me started on sundaes. Yummo!”

With our conversation going nowhere, I sighed and lay on my back again. Several uneventful seconds passed by in which I considered yodeling to get his attention.

“Rainbow,” he said, “I like rainbow.”
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I managed to get 200 words exactly and included the word "orange"! I'm looking forward to stopping by everyone else's blogs! Leave a link to your post if you comment so I can stop by and check out your piece too. :)


If you liked my entry and would like to vote for me, I'm #90 on the linky list at Rachael Harrie's site.

28 comments:

  1. Oh my gosh, I loved it!! The scene was so simple but I could visualize everything going on! The dialogue seemed to flow so naturally! Great job!

    I'm entry #19

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  2. That was a fun read!You managed to get their voices through in a few words. Great job!

    You already stopped by my blog to check out my entry (I'm #36 on the list). Thank you! :)

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  3. That was great! She really got to him. I want to see what happens next. Will he help her escape? Bring her an ice cream cone? What?

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  4. Well done (totally voted for you)!
    I can't wait to read more of your work. I have a good hunch I am going to enjoy it. :)

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  5. LOL! I like the snark of the MC... and clever with the orange jumpsuit and how that was a big clue in the story. Very fun, Komal ;)

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  6. Prison romance? Yes please! Great job!

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  7. Now that was a fun scene. Nice one! :)

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  8. This was a fun read! Nice job! :)

    I'm #37

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  9. It was an engrossing scene that pulls you right in. Excellent prose, Roland

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  10. Great story, Komal. It has a lot of potential to develop into a longer piece since it can go practically anywhere. You got my vote :-) I don't participate in the Challenge this time (did last one) but I love to visit the contestants and read their entries.

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  11. Very captivating and original. The last line was brilliant.

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  12. yodeling? good one! I like rainbow too - if can find it
    I'm #103

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  13. Aww, I loved that last line too! Great piece :D

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  14. She got him to talk! Yay! Nice upbeat story, even with her being held prisoner. Good job! I'm entry #96.

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  15. Jail cell romance?...original piece and very well done.

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  16. lol. I like how she wanted the jumpsuit to be butter yellow. haha. Great job!

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  17. Nice voice. And I love rainbow sherbert, too!

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  18. Nice original piece! Glad she got him to talk :-) I'm #61.

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  19. 4hrs is some serious dedication. I want to know more! Mine is #71

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  20. Surprising entry. I wonder what happened next. Lighthearted despite the prison setting - wonder what she's in for?

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  21. Ha! This reminds me of the guards at Buckingham Palace. Very cute - well done:) I'm #52.

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  22. Thanks for stopping by everyone! It was great going through and reading your entries. I'm sure it'll be tough for the judges to pick winners.

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  23. Showed a lot of her character; no moping about why she was there, but just wanting to make some small talk that could turn into more. Nice

    Tale Spinning #58

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  24. Wow, you created two very intriguing character in such a small space. I hope you're saving this to turn into a longer piece.

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    1. Thank you, Jocelyn! This piece was inspired by my WIP but I can't seem to fit it into my story. Maybe I'll file it away for a future project.

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